My New Paper

For my new paper, I've decided to redo my literary analysis. I've decided to work on sentence fluency and conventions. My voice is fine in the paper, along with, my word choice. I worked on my organization with an outline, required in class. Dr. D says that my ideas are great with a strong argument and well supported evidence.

The two aspects of my paper that I choose to edit are sentence fluency and conventions. The reason I chose to work on sentence fluency of my paper because there are quotes that are independent. Quotations are the main issue with sentence fluency. I also chose conventions because a few times, I put the quotations inside the period. Also, I have one comma splice. The conventions I messed up on are major conventions, and that is why I choose to fix them.
Reading Times:
3/17/13=City of Glass; 35 min.; 33 pages
3/18/13=City of Glass; 28 min.; 28 pages
3/21/13=City of Glass; 10 min.; 9 pages
3/21/13=City of Glass; 47 min.; 46 pages
3/23/13=City of Glass; 26 min.; 24 pages
3/24/13=City of Glass; 18 min.; 16 pages